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WURST POME EVER
This is the wurst poem ever writ
it has no rhyme, the meter's sh@ t
well maybe it has one lone rhyme
but it's hardly worth your time
I don't know what the intent is
message as clear as soda fizz
mizpelling and tipos by the duzzen
as purty as an old maid cuzzin
You can relax I'm almost finished
is there such a word as ginnished ?
go on back to having fun
this monstrosity is finally done
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
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Comments
Nordic cloud
Thu, 2010-11-18 02:50
scidding fizzibles out of ears
Was it wurst you slake my thirst,
for sudden bouts of fun,
you have just begun to turn the knob
and out it comes with buttons on;
scidding fizzibles out of ears
slicing wizicles out of some,
where's the gun, I've ginnished!
:) Ann in the clouds.
AND WHY NOT?
"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.
scribbler
Thu, 2010-11-18 08:10
pome
just a little thing for fun. Glad you enjoyed.......scribbler
scribbler
Thu, 2010-11-18 08:12
pome
I don't think any here were ever that bad lol. glad you came by..........scribbler
mand
Thu, 2010-11-18 04:10
Witty
You come up with some brilliant ideas Stan! and yet again - I'm pleased to say - I'm giggling and laughing, a great start to a Thursday morning!
Thanks Stan the Man
Love Mand xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
scribbler
Thu, 2010-11-18 08:13
pome
just a rerun from my old blog. Glad it gave you a chuckle.........stan
scribbler
Thu, 2010-11-18 08:18
pome
Alas , If that's all you can find wrong with this, your career as a critic is doomed LMAO. It seems that everybody has enjoyed this oldie but moldy. Thanks for suggestions but rekkon I'll leeve it ass iss..........skribblur
scribbler
Thu, 2010-11-18 13:37
pome
Hey Rosy...glad you liked it.......stan
loved
Sat, 2010-11-20 21:21
uuuuuuuuuuuuurayyyyy an inbentor
i lake yaar sence
oh humor
it s laike a tumor
uuuuraye greateter poeter
that me taught twas i
the honly one
its so
thad
now am i dunn
loved
scribbler
Sat, 2010-11-20 22:53
wurst
just another poem of mine before editing lol.Tanks four the vizit......skriblur
judyanne
Sun, 2010-11-21 03:19
ruly funnie stan
ginnished? - ful ov gin ov corse.....
live
jusy
xxxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
scribbler
Sun, 2010-11-21 09:58
pome
Guess we need to alert Webster's to invention of a new word lol........stan