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I Miss My Mom
I’m already there
Somewhere else
The only way I can still be
Anywhere
Turned in my receipts
And tore up the old timecards
I’m not owed anything
I decided I’m free
When she left me
Time can’t hold me anymore
Even if I wanted to squeeze back in
Even I I begged
I couldn’t pry back into
That old story
I’m already there
In the new place
On a couch
In the living room
On the Blackfoot river
Drinking cocktails with my good mother
Watching music videos
Gods house
Press pause Mom,
For a second
I need to refill my drink
Waiting
For the last of this body
To move up too
Style / type:
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Mon, 2024-09-09 06:51
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Candlewitch
Wed, 2024-09-11 09:29
Dear Captain,
I bet there is a story behind this poem... it is intriguing to say the least! I think I would very much like to hear this tale. I like these lines best:
Time can’t hold me anymore
Even if I wanted to squeeze back in
Even I I begged
I couldn’t pry back into
That old story
*hugs, Cat
*
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captain 2
Thu, 2024-09-12 20:00
Candle
Thanks for reading and commenting. My Mom recently passed away. It really switched my brain into a different mode, as I'm sure it does for everyone when they lose their first parent. It shifts the world. You realize this is a temporary place, you realize it in hard terms. And your next. In a way, you give up your innocence, even if your pretty old yourself. I sort of realized this all an illusion and all my experiences and memories are more real than the physical world. I can't go back into the daily concerns that used to be all i was. I Will always remain out of time now, hanging with my Mom, that's a place I can keep. We used to love to sit and share song lyrics together, having cocktails and breaking the music down. I had an awesome Mom - she taught me to appreciate art , music, and ppetry. Those memories now are as real as the current day to me. And I believe I'll see her again somehow. I'm already there in some ways. That's kind of the story. Thanks
Captain
Candlewitch
Fri, 2024-09-13 07:51
Dear Captain,
I am sorry for your physical and emotional losses. ( I lost my Dad when I was eighteen, his spirit traveled from Minnesota to northern California to be with me just before I heard the news)
I am so happy for you, that you and your Mother had the shared gift of music between you! Music is a whole new world. There is Magic in music. you should immerse your life in music! I listen to music every day, all day, lol.
I wish for your Mother, peace and music where ever she is, there is no pain.
*hugs, Cat
*
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captain 2
Fri, 2024-09-13 10:24
Thank you
Your so kind and thoughtful. Thanks.
Captian