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LIST of HINTS
Listen to the peepers sing
announcing their desire for spring
I see the first gold daffodils
are blooming on south facing hills
The pink blossomed cherry trees
bound to get nipped by a late freeze
The neighbors working loud and hard
mowing wild onions in their yard
People showing more bare skin
some so much it's near a sin
The first turkey gobble of the year
as breeding season's growing near
Robins seen in flocks and bunches
listening for some wormy munches
This evening bats flit through the air
seeking insects not yet there
Folks driving with their windows down
as they speed around the town
These are things I see and hear
when springtime is growing near
thought I'd try a list poem..............scribbler
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Structured: Western
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Comments
scribbler
Wed, 2011-03-02 12:42
wow
that was fast! I think this qualifies as a list poem and expect to hear if it isn't lol. Glad you enjoyed it list or not.............stan
scribbler
Wed, 2011-03-02 12:58
hello Bee
The more effort in writing, the less needed in reading I reckon. Thanks for the visit and kind comment.................stan
mona
Wed, 2011-03-02 23:46
Ahhh now I can read a real list poem and can call it a poem
That is Supreb Stan.
Mona Rose
scribbler
Thu, 2011-03-03 07:40
mona
best I leave it to others to judge, but it WAS my intent to write a list poem, perhaps I have. Thank you mona..........scribbler
mona
Thu, 2011-03-03 08:07
Stan
best I leave it to others to judge, ???
Mona Rose
scribbler
Thu, 2011-03-03 09:05
mona
others than myself
mona
Thu, 2011-03-03 09:09
Ops
Smiles
Mona Rose
KINGZOMBIE
Thu, 2011-03-03 06:01
A beautiful picture that you have painted
I'm actually noticing some of these things happening right outside my house, I love spring and this was a great read.Please excuse me for my ignorance though, can you explain to me what a list poem is?
Thanks for sharing this, it was very much enjoyed.
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"For what is it to die, But to stand in the sun and melt into the wind?"
scribbler
Thu, 2011-03-03 07:48
hello King
In my understanding a list poem is just that, a list of things put in poetic form.I expect even a grocery list would do.
I need to pick up some more milk
or a substitute of similar ilk
and I see we're down to just one egg
best get a dozen and nutmeg
If you used to watch the old show Hee Haw, you might remember "grandpa" listing what's for dinner as a rhyme. Of course a list poem could as easily be free verse...................scribbler
KINGZOMBIE
Thu, 2011-03-03 07:51
thank you very much
Thats kind of what I figured it was, I just wanted to be sure.Thanks again for the help.
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"For what is it to die, But to stand in the sun and melt into the wind?"
scribbler
Thu, 2011-03-03 08:26
king
To be sure of definition you might well ask others, but I am always glad to help..........stan
Pixee
Thu, 2011-03-03 09:36
Your are a true wordsmith
You are a true wordsmith. Reading your poem put me in your poem. I could feel and see what you wrote. To put poems together and come up with something like that is a talent for sure. It is amazing. I truely enjoyed reading this poem. I was there.
Poetry is the living soul of the writer.
by Pixee
Friends,
Pixee
scribbler
Thu, 2011-03-03 18:02
Pixee
Now I'll have to buy all new hats to fit my swelling head lol. I am glad you enjoyed this..............scribbler
mand
Thu, 2011-03-03 09:57
Hi Stan
I very much enjoyed this lovely spring time poem.
Thanks Stan
Love Mand xxxx
scribbler
Thu, 2011-03-03 18:27
greetings mand
Was beginning to wonder what happened to you. I am always glad to have your company..............stan
amalzamani
Thu, 2011-03-03 11:33
Yes, I guess this one counts as a Poem List and it actually
brings to memory...
My Favourite Things
Raindrops on roses and whiskers on kittens,
bright copper kettles and warm woolen mittens,
brown paper packages tied up with strings,
these are a few of my favorite things.
Cream colored ponies and crisp apple strudels,
door bells and sleigh bells and schnitzel with noodles.
Wild geese that fly with the moon on their wings.
these are a few of my favorite things.
Girls in a white dresses with a blue satin sashes,
snowflakes that stay on my nose and eyelashes,
silver white winters that melt into springs,
these are a few of my favorite things.
When the dog bites, when the bee stings,
when I'm feeling sad,
I simply remember my favorite things,
and then I don't feel so bad.
Raindrops on roses and whiskers on kittens,
bright copper kettles and warm woolen mittens,
brown paper packages tied up with strings,
these are a few of my favorite things.
Cream colored ponies and crisp apple strudels,
door bells and sleigh bells and schnitzel with noodles.
Wild geese that fly with the moon on their wings.
these are a few of my favorite things.
Girls in white dresses with blue satin sashes,
snowflakes that stay on my nose and eyelashes,
silver white winters that melt into springs,
these are a few of my favorite things.
When the dog bites, when the bee stings,
when I'm feeling sad,
I simply remember my favorite things,
and then I don't feel so bad.
you recognize these words?
scribbler
Thu, 2011-03-03 18:20
yes
Mary Poppins. I've always said some of the best poetry of the past 50 years has been in song form lol.............stan
amalzamani
Thu, 2011-03-03 11:39
Spring Time Hints
Is my suggestion for a title
I also suggest the following
are blooming on south facing hills
Blooming on south facing hills
The pink blossomed cherry trees
Pink blossomed cherry trees
The neighbors working loud and hard
Neighbors working loud and hard
enjoyable one...thank you Stan
scribbler
Thu, 2011-03-03 18:22
thanks
I will consider all in inevitable edit.............scribbler
scribbler
Thu, 2011-03-03 18:24
hi
We've been having frost in the mornings and short sleeve weather in the afternoon. Have to dress in layers and shed as the day wears on lol...............stan