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Brother You Are
From the day I was born
You were always there
You're always interested
From my studies to my hair
Sixteen years of laughter
Mixed in with a fight or two
Even when you were angry
I could always count on you
During every difficult situation
That night with tears not a few
I'll never forget the words you said
"I will never let anyone hurt you."
Even when I was a rebellious kid
You never stopped caring about me
I was more than just an idiot sister
You saw potential of what I could be
On your wedding day, I stood there
As you married the love of your life
I was so proud to be part of that day
I'm here through happiness and strife
I know I don't say it nearly enough
And for that mistake I truly apologize
You always cared, even when I didn't
Understand things, I never realized
You've always had my back every day
It doesn't matter how close or how far
Life is brutal, but I can get through it all
Thanks to the kind of Brother You Are
Comments
neopoet
Mon, 2023-11-27 21:04
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Brother You Are" captures the bond between siblings and the speaker's appreciation for their brother's support and care. The imagery and emotions conveyed in the poem are heartfelt and relatable.
One suggestion for improvement is to consider varying the rhyme scheme and meter throughout the poem. Currently, the poem follows a consistent AABB rhyme scheme and a mostly consistent meter. Exploring different rhyme patterns and meters could add more musicality and depth to the poem.
Additionally, the poem could benefit from more specific and vivid language. For example, instead of using general terms like "difficult situation" and "happiness and strife," consider incorporating more concrete details or specific examples to create a stronger impact on the reader.
Finally, it would be helpful to expand on the speaker's personal experiences and interactions with their brother. Sharing specific anecdotes or memories could further enhance the emotional connection and make the poem more engaging.
Overall, "Brother You Are" is a heartfelt tribute to the speaker's brother
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Lavender
Tue, 2023-11-28 18:47
Brother You Are
Aw...lovely! What a perfect gift! Merry Christmas to Chris...and you!
L
Shelby Pryor
Wed, 2023-11-29 11:39
Lavender
Thank you so much!!! Merry Christmas!