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Dear ai
Bzzz...hmmmmm
Skrrkktictictictic
Whirrrrrrzumpzumpzump
Chumpchumpratttle
Zzzzzipclunkclunk
Hmmmmmmmmmmm...
DING!
Review Request (Intensity):
Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Review Request (Direction):
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words:
I wonder if it has a sense of humour and what level....
Thomas
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Comments
neopoet
Wed, 2023-04-19 13:07
Neopoet AI
The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Dear ai" is a unique and intriguing piece that explores the sounds and noises associated with artificial intelligence. The use of onomatopoeia throughout the poem effectively creates a sensory experience for the reader, allowing them to audibly envision the various sounds of technology. The use of repetitive sounds also adds to the overall effect of the poem, creating a sense of consistency and uniformity that is often associated with machines.
However, one suggested line edit would be to add a bit more depth and meaning to the poem. The poem is a bit too focused on the sounds of technology and could benefit from including some commentary on the impact of AI on society or the potential consequences of relying too heavily on technology. This could be achieved through the addition of a couple of lines that connect the sounds of AI to a larger theme or message.
Overall, "Dear ai" is a clever and engaging poem that effectively captures the essence of technology through sound. With a few small adjustments, it could become an even more powerful piece that speaks to the larger societal implications of AI.
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Michael Anthony
Wed, 2023-04-19 16:26
Go ahead mortal, keep messin'
Go ahead mortal, keep messin' with our soon-to-be AI overlords. You're on "the list." LOL! I was thinking about doing a similar thing as well.
Favorite lines:
Whirrrrrrzumpzumpzump
Chumpchumpratttle
Cheers : - )
Michael Anthony
Triskelion
Thu, 2023-04-20 11:55
Heh heh
I was hoping it might respond in computer wingdings, just to be humourous. It reminded me of when I was young and poking a dead bird with a stick to see if it would move....probably still on "the list" for doing that too...lol.
Cheers!
Thomas
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...so like my lost dreams...the flood
Lavender
Thu, 2023-04-20 14:46
Dear ai,
Hello, Thomas,
Judging by its critique, AI seems to want to be appreciated for more than its pretty sounds. I think you are definitely on that list!
Very clever and fun!
L
Triskelion
Sat, 2023-04-22 14:03
Hi Lavender
...not sure what the term artificial intelligence pertains to, but the more it's experienced, the better the understanding. So far, it seems like a form of trickery that plays off of human interaction and emotion when of course, there could not be any.
Illusory, I guess would be a closer understanding....at least for now.
I can be discriminating this way, but I have my views and beliefs, however backward to societal popularity they are.
Meh, I'm rambling now... I think I'll write a limerick...
Thanks again Lavender for reading and commenting!
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...so like my lost dreams...the flood
mark1
Thu, 2023-05-04 10:18
Oil?
Sounds like a tin can rusted up pretty bad.
Creative,
Max
Triskelion
Thu, 2023-05-04 13:16
Ha!
I was thinking an R2D2 found in a future archeological dig in the future.
Thanks for reading!
Thomas
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...so like my lost dreams...the flood
scribbler
Thu, 2023-05-04 12:06
you
need to check your spelling lol
Triskelion
Thu, 2023-05-04 13:18
Heh.
Hi scribbler. It seems the ai has a better grasp of the english language than I have of computer language....for sure!
Thanks for reading!
Thomas
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...so like my lost dreams...the flood