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Happiness
Happiness we seek
Making life’s trials recede
In our thoughts each day
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Geezer
Mon, 2023-04-03 11:43
If you are...
going for a Haiku, you need, [well, should have], another syllable in that second line. I would suggest:
Making [our] life trials recede.
Just saying. Happy thought for the day! ~ Geezer.
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Clentin
Mon, 2023-04-03 12:23
Thank you for reading and
Thank you for reading and comments
I double checked the syllable count
It was 5,7,5
Geezer
Mon, 2023-04-03 14:13
Sorry...
My American accent is showing! LoL
I counted [trials] as one. Ooops! ~ Geezer.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
Mr joghe
Mon, 2023-04-03 16:11
Kudos
Good write!
Happiness is the priority of every necessity
"Words are currency of ideas and have the power to change world. Ride your pen on the rough road."
Clentin
Mon, 2023-04-03 17:11
Thank you for reading my
Thank you for reading my poems and your generous comments
Clentin
Mon, 2023-04-03 17:12
Thanks, it made me re check
Thanks, it made me re check things
Thanks
Clentin
Tue, 2023-04-04 10:28
Thank you. Experimenting with
Thank you. Experimenting with Haiku