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The Love
There are things that
heart and emotions
can not explain.
Feelings of
hurt, love and pain
are one and the same.
But the love for
someone will only
grow, fade or
stay the same.
Style / type:
Free verse
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Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
Sun, 2023-01-22 07:01
I think this is pretty complete
Quick, expressive, truthful. One quick suggestion…
Feelings of
hurt, love and pain
are one in (and) the same.
I believe the saying is “one and the same”
Being from Rhode Island when people say that it totally sounds like “one ‘n’ the same”. What’s worse is that we’ve basically lost the “r” sound from our speech. “My sista Dah-lene makes a supa good chowdah.” Our state begins with that sound. Lol
Heather Perry
Sun, 2023-01-22 18:07
Thank you
Thank you for seeing that
Heather Perry
Heather Perry
Sun, 2023-01-22 18:08
Thank you
Thank you for your comment
Heather Perry
Candlewitch
Sun, 2023-01-22 15:30
hello Heather,
your poem prods one to ponder... good job!
*hugs, Cat
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Heather Perry
Sun, 2023-01-22 18:08
Thank you
Thank you for your comment
Heather Perry