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Explosion
Beginning
With soft felt ripples
Comes the swelling of awakened
Emotions
Each tremor becoming a catalyst
Fed by silent smiles and
Unsolicited words
Ignited by thoughts of imagined
Happiness comes the
End
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Comments
Lavender
Tue, 2023-01-10 19:45
Explosion
Hi, Clentin,
Hmm...I will be curious to read your response. Ar first read, this felt like a laugh exploding. Then reading a few more times, it feels like the awareness of true happiness while with a special someone. Maybe something else? I am wondering why it had to end...
Thank you,
L
Clentin
Wed, 2023-01-11 04:04
I wrote this about a family
I wrote this about a family relationship that ended abruptly.
Lavender
Wed, 2023-01-11 09:21
Hello, Clentin,
I am so very sorry.
Peace,
L
Rosewood Apothecary
Wed, 2023-01-11 07:05
Deep
After reading your comment the meaning of this changed for me immediately. It’s really a very good observation on these types of relationships. Family needs boundaries too and older generations feel differently about this.
Tim
Clentin
Wed, 2023-01-11 09:08
Thank you for you remarks
Thank you for you remarks
Candlewitch
Wed, 2023-01-11 07:31
dear Clentin,
my family of women were like living with three rattlesnakes. survival was the only relationship or goal. this is why I have a difficult time relating to your poem, but I would like to understand your message. can you help me with this?
*hugs, Cat
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Clentin
Wed, 2023-01-11 09:09
I wrote this after a passing
I wrote this after a passing of a very close relative
Candlewitch
Wed, 2023-01-11 09:21
dear Clentin,
I am so sorry for your loss...
*hugs, Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.