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Naughty Or Nice (December Contest)
I don't know if
you find it naughty,
but I find it nice,
Gazing into the beauty
of the quiet naked skies.
I find it nice to sneak
through the shining stars;
those to be closer
and many other afar.
I'll be stealing a look
onto the sleepy moon,
for it makes me flying
Like a musical tune.
And yes,
if you find it naughty,
I find it nice,
staring in your beauty,
not only once ,
but a million times.
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Candlewitch
Thu, 2022-12-15 06:01
dear Rula,
a great entry and answer to the challenge! it sounds even better when read out loud, it rolls right off the tongue!
*love & hugs, Cat
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And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
Candlewitch
Thu, 2022-12-15 06:18
nice...
change made and noted ;)
*love, Cat
*
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And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
Rula
Thu, 2022-12-15 06:43
Dearest Candlewhich
I am grateful for the your kind comments. I am happy to know it has your approval.
Thank you so much.
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Rosewood Apothecary
Thu, 2022-12-15 17:18
Interesting
What a really unconventional approach to that challenge and a really great poem. Awesome idea, good execution. Like Cat said a breeze to read. It just pulls you right along.
Tim
Rula
Fri, 2022-12-16 06:37
Hello Tim
Thank you so much for your non endong encouraging words. You made my day with such a comment
Always grateful sir.
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Lavender
Thu, 2022-12-15 18:03
Naughty or Nice
Hi, Rula,
This has a lovely feel to it, softly traveling upward and beyond. Beautiful final line!
L
Rula
Fri, 2022-12-16 06:43
Dearest Lavender
Your kind comments warms my heart and urges my muse to bring more.
Always appreciate your feedback and comments
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lovedly
Fri, 2022-12-16 05:31
full of naughtiness
and of course NICEEEEEEEEEEeeeeeeeeeeeeee
Rula
Fri, 2022-12-16 06:44
Dear Lovedly
You're so kind. Your comment adds to my happiness.
Thank you!
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lovedly
Fri, 2022-12-16 07:05
In the hour of sadness
there lies only one path
of sowing down
seeds of happiness
Time will just pass
and perfumes of Roses
towards the sky cast
as long as watering lasts
ma'am
Emerald1
Sat, 2022-12-17 09:55
Amazing
Such a creative take on the prompt , reads so beautifully with exquisite imagery , a delightful starlight filled experience /read
Rula
Sun, 2022-12-18 06:32
Thank you dear
for the kind visit. I wish all to join the party.
Looking forward to reading of your work.
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RoseBlack
Thu, 2022-12-29 19:47
A unique
Way of tackling this challenge and beautifully written as always.
~RoseBlack~
Rula
Fri, 2022-12-30 02:43
Thank you sweet Carrie
You really make my day!
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Seren
Fri, 2023-02-17 02:12
Dear Rula
This is just Gorgeous. I'm so taken with this one.
Congratulations on your win it's much deserved my friend.
Wow I am still there.
Love Jayne x
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Rula
Sun, 2023-04-02 13:11
Sorry for the late reply
Hello dear Serene
Thank you for your congrats.
Always great to hear from you dear.
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