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DEFINING SIN
SIN NOT SIN NOT sin
there is no worldly sin
unless you leave your imagination
for others to ink
you were brought here by your parents actions
now they've enjoyed and gone
others say they had sinned
ask them how their parents brought them in
other that the darkness
no veil no sin
why for others now they say
SIN
it's the first step to life begin
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Gracy
Sat, 2021-11-20 12:36
Hi Lovedly, highly original
Hi Lovedly, highly original poem. It was St. Augustine who said we are all sinners.
I like the way you've put the SIN into words. Enjoyed, Gracy
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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury
lovedly
Sat, 2021-11-20 19:53
kindness Gracy
tis creative
Triskelion
Sat, 2021-11-20 14:28
As usual..
Your unique perspective and wisdom concerning life's intricacies impresses me. It is that unique perspective that contemporary "poets" should embrace.
Thomas
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...so like my lost dreams...the flood
Hendela
Sun, 2021-11-21 10:00
In Impressed
Your insight is impressionable! Keep writing...
lovedly
Sun, 2021-11-21 13:17
Thanks
YOU R NEW
Abby
Mon, 2021-11-22 19:57
I love how you created this
I love how you created this around the idea of sin and what it is and means. This poem is well done- short and sweet/impactful.
"To fly is to fall."
lovedly
Mon, 2021-11-22 21:43
Hi Abby
when one goes to a mall or the airport or to library one sees so many things originally visionary the poet tarries listens then thinks for a moment if one is a natural poet music strings in ears and when the poet is amused comes out the desired muse a natural sequence you know best