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Stones (imagery workshop)
The tangible weight of centuries nestled in the palm of your hand.
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scribbler
Tue, 2017-06-27 13:01
yeah
that scribbler guy is a huge pain in the butt ain't he? lol
jane210660
Tue, 2017-06-27 06:03
Very beautiful
I enjoyed this one very much.
Love the connection with ages past.
Jx
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weirdelf
Tue, 2017-06-27 08:25
Excellent.
Wow all of us, under Stan's guidance, are on a winner here.
My favourite aphorism about poetry, actually said by Eisenstein in reference to film, is that the art is "ruthless elimination of the inessential". Conversely, imagery provides the potential for maximisation of meaning in minimum words.
Gonna repost this on the workshop thread.
cheers,
Jess
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vandiemenspeak
Tue, 2017-06-27 09:01
Succinct and sleekly held moment..
With a touch of Blake (conscious?) - from "Auguries of innocence" no less:
Hold Infinity in the palm of your hand
And Eternity in an hour
But condensed even further - wonderful line.
Thanks,
Chris.
Chris Hall - Tasmania
Grossbooted draymen rolled barrels dullthudding out of Prince's stores and bumped them up on the brewery float. On the brewery float bumped dullthudding barrels rolled by grossbooted draymen out of Prince's stores.
weirdelf
Tue, 2017-06-27 09:07
well spotted,
sir.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
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scribbler
Tue, 2017-06-27 13:03
Hi Rhia
The only thing I'd suggest is changing centuries to eons. But I Really like this......stan
Race_9togo
Tue, 2017-06-27 22:52
There, that's it, right there.
The unfolding of unfathomable depths of reality from a single sentence.
Most very excellently well done.
Respectfully, Race
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Race_9togo
Tue, 2017-06-27 22:52
There, that's it, right there.
The unfolding of unfathomable depths of reality from a single sentence.
Most very excellently well done.
Respectfully, Race
"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo
http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo