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Pause the guns
So much to be done in a small human space,
such turmoil within, without disgrace
If all that conformity needs us to be
a shingle in the roof that reality
Requires, to shelter us from rebels that fall
like plummeting lead shot, molten in balls
From within the time-ticking eye, we call sanity,
Pause for a while and think on it all
Were you wrenched from the womb to subsist?
or did you come, willing traveller, answering the call
To thrive, more than exist?
Caught in a madman’s' vision of pain
Don't let custom overwhelm, nor haul you
from that simple miracle, you became-
Nor believe the fraught voices, without, within,
you have nothing at all to explain
Just this thought: be good, at what you do,
and are - pure, gentle, lost but humane.
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Comments
alidzain
Sat, 2016-03-05 11:08
love this, man
its laden with thoughts.
Alid
vandiemenspeak
Sat, 2016-03-05 18:38
Thanks Alid!
May the guns stay paused permanently, both those inside, and those outside of us ;) - Just a little meditation. Love your avatar pic by the way, is he/she Wing Chun?
Take care.
Chris.
Chris Hall - Tasmania
Grossbooted draymen rolled barrels dullthudding out of Prince's stores and bumped them up on the brewery float. On the brewery float bumped dullthudding barrels rolled by grossbooted draymen out of Prince's stores.
alidzain
Sun, 2016-03-06 02:11
Yo Chris
No, its silat. (I believe the martial art originates from the malays during the sultanate era.
Alid
vandiemenspeak
Sun, 2016-03-06 05:03
Cool, I'll have to look that one up..
It's an interesting topic and a region where history is often overlooked.
Thanks.
Chris.
Chris Hall - Tasmania
Grossbooted draymen rolled barrels dullthudding out of Prince's stores and bumped them up on the brewery float. On the brewery float bumped dullthudding barrels rolled by grossbooted draymen out of Prince's stores.
Roscoe Lane
Sun, 2016-03-06 04:04
I agree,
I agree with the every sentiment expressed in this poem. Well written . Regards Roscoe
Roscoe Llane,
Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.
vandiemenspeak
Sun, 2016-03-06 05:01
Cheers Roscoe..
Always good to hear from someone who's seeing/understanding the same things unfolding in this mad world..
Thanks.
Chris.
Chris Hall - Tasmania
Grossbooted draymen rolled barrels dullthudding out of Prince's stores and bumped them up on the brewery float. On the brewery float bumped dullthudding barrels rolled by grossbooted draymen out of Prince's stores.