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To the lovely Logophile
I am no silent reader,
for I can hear no sound
In the cold dispassionate voyage
where lips are stilled and words abound
That are ground down to a grist
for one that mills about the page
Waiting for music to somehow rise
when it’s otherwise engaged
Unmelodious and misbegotten
in the silent scanning mind
Realize then, what you’ve forgotten
how you were told, to erase the lines
Now, hear the music in all that’s spoken
not barked on barren, broken ground
Where wordless, the famished poverty of
language, starving naked is found
Rather, languish, guilt free
in that childlike glut of dream
Where words that hurt
did truly choke
And words that felt you,
screamed.
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Last few words:
Alright - sort of free verse (again) - categories beget boxes. Written for a dear friend.
Revised, and a few alterations made.
Editing stage:
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Comments
wesley snow
Mon, 2015-11-16 18:41
Good poem.
Let me tell you what I didn't like.
Capitalizing the first letter of each line is confusing. It starts a sentence every line. It's up to you, but I think it is a fad whose time is gone. Especially since you use no punctuation.
Otherwise it is a successful poem.
W. H. Snow
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vandiemenspeak
Thu, 2015-12-10 07:41
Ah, it's just good old Microsoft..
Bloody word, and the default settings, that I, to be perfectly honest, haven't got round to changing. That and my tardiness getting to a terminal from time to time, to make revisions. I am agreeing here, I think the capitalization is unnecessary. Stick around a while, and I will get round to fixing it ;).
Thanks for stopping by Wes.
Cheers from down under,
Chris.
Chris Hall - Tasmania
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