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Lamp (An Exploration of Style- Haiku)
In the far distance
a light leads me to meaning
I follow or not
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Sparrow
Thu, 2015-05-14 04:34
Jess
A Haiku perfectly executed and the questions it brings up are relevant to the original Japanese writing form.
Yours with nothing more to say,
Ian
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weirdelf
Mon, 2015-05-25 03:36
ta
mate
cheers,
Jess
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judyanne
Mon, 2015-05-25 06:52
a haiku from the master
Great one Jess
Perfect cutting line - you make it seem so simple...
Love judy
xxx
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weirdelf
Tue, 2015-05-26 09:54
I know why I never wrote a novel
and instead mastered the shortest forms, haiku and limerick. It is because I am a coward and a control freak. I'm afraid of exposing my dark side. Neopoets think they've seen it? Not half.
cheers,
Jess
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'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
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scribbler
Mon, 2015-05-25 15:32
The good
thing about Haiku is they leave little volume in which to make mistakes. The "syllable" count is either right or it isn't and the message is either there or not. But in this one even the mood is Eastern........stan
weirdelf
Mon, 2015-05-25 16:30
ta
though it is not truly haiku or senryu by content.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
Pugilist
Wed, 2015-05-27 11:39
Content rules for haiku have morphed
I like this. It flows and feels right.
The rules for haiku have morphed to a degree that, in some cases, even syllable count/sound units are being ignored.
But this hearkens back to the intent of a haiku, in my mind.
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