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Showers of Love
Flowers feed on the rain
and I lean on your name
sunshine warm the earth
my heart burning with thirst
Twilight dances with the moon
and I wanna dance with you
rainbows form in my heart
my heart rain from the start
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Barbara Writes
Sun, 2011-01-09 00:20
Showers of love
Thanks Xena, Glad you like it
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Barbara Writes
Sun, 2011-01-09 08:45
Hi
if you have a third stanza to share let me see it.
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raj
Sun, 2011-01-09 07:22
Dear Barbara
a very nice comparison of feelings of love with the moods of nature...
warmly..
raj (sublime_ocean)
Barbara Writes
Sun, 2011-01-09 08:47
Moods of nature
thanks I like the concept moods of nature
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scribbler
Sun, 2011-01-09 09:24
showers
as usual you are able to get to the heart of the matter in a compact write. And as usual the nitpicker is gonna point out typos lol:
l-1 drop the S in feeds
l-7 drop the S in forms
I'll bet you wish I'd leave your stuff alone.....................scribbler
Barbara Writes
Sun, 2011-01-09 15:28
Never never never
Never stop being a nitpicker, and nope
I like you nitpicking my stuff
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