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A Study in Pink: section ten
Mackwill paces rapidly about his cold boudoir.
He’s found a thing tucked deep inside his oak and steel armoire.
How it got there he can’t guess spite knowing what it is.
Now he has a problem more pronounced than just his biz.
‘Her thoughts race absorbing facts found near the crime scene.’
“Guy, I want the girl, the barmaid seen, you know of whom I speak.
She saw a thing I want to know and know before she leaks
the secrets to the press and all, but here’s the other pain:
the trail of blood in the hotel come in from out the rain”
“Where did it lead?” Guy queries her. “Where did the blood trail lead?”
“It dried away inside the joint, just past ‘The Grill and Mead’.”
“Then we must search the Hotel grounds ‘til find the blood again.
The carpets will be wet you see. The steps in from the rain”.
And Mackwill stares upon the thing not knowing how it came.
He can’t recall a single thing from last night’s gory maim.
Now what do? How can he tell his all too fearful wife.
He hides his eyes and looks not on the bloodied murder knife.
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wesley snow
Tue, 2014-09-30 19:52
Rula,
it is your turn again. Surprise. I will be moving sections into the Main Thread as soon as 1). Stan is satisfied with his submission and 2). Loved posts her submission (number nine) as a poem, so I can get to it. We need to critique number nine also.
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scribbler
Thu, 2014-10-02 00:34
you
Know I'm seldom satisfied with my stuff but I've done an edit and It's good enough to move on.
Now to yours lol
You had m e suspecting a head was found not a knife lol. Good twist at the end.......stan
Geezer
Tue, 2014-09-30 20:23
Very nice...
I like the false trail, that seems to lead to the murderer. I also like the idea of being able to quote a line of the last work, just to keep the thread alive! Nice! Oh, sorry about the motorcycle, I didn't remember that it was 1888! I was thinking more of like, 1910 for some reason. Sorry, maybe I should change it to a bicycle? ~ Gee
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wesley snow
Tue, 2014-09-30 20:54
I think we're close enough
to the motorcycle to leave it.
It may not be a false trail. What if Mog possessed him or maybe he's being framed. That's up to everyone.
W. H. Snow
A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley
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alidzain
Wed, 2014-10-01 00:36
This is going to get more intense.
At least that's what this piece is telling me. The murder weapon on my character??? Oh no, the plot is really going to give me one headache.
Alid
lonlyhrtsclub13
Wed, 2014-10-01 01:40
all right
You have called me out...it is 140 am here so I will post mine tomorrow.
Keep Writing,
Carrie
"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"
lonlyhrtsclub13
Wed, 2014-10-01 09:20
Section 12 is posted
This is definitely getting more intense and interesting.....
Keep Writing,
Carrie
"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"
Rula
Wed, 2014-10-01 15:44
sir
You've pushed the story to an exciting point. It is something 'I' need to learn
Thank you.
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Barbara Writes
Wed, 2014-10-01 21:26
Stan
Its a good one.
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lovedly
Wed, 2014-10-01 22:15
hi Rula
17 lines and not 8 perverse
and you must keep section 9 in mind
else you sayings may become perverse
Snow judge ...Sir!