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LOVE HAS PASSED
Love has passed us
like the wind
over the mountains
into shadow
Here now, we rove
Wretched
like ghosts
under these starless skies
and grey shores
bound in grief
and in misery
Until the passing of time.
Love has passed
like the wind
into Shadow.
Last few words:
~the best years are in yesterday~
Editing stage:
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Comments
weirdelf
Fri, 2014-03-21 08:02
I can't believe I have missed your work until now
there is a wonderous elegance to this piece that elevates it beyond the mundane. I will be sure to check out your earlier works.
I'm afraid I can offer no constructive criticism however perhaps hearing it in another's voice may offer some perspective?
http://vocaroo.com/i/s0wcWvwU0088
cheers,
Jess
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WonderGolly
Fri, 2014-03-28 07:53
many thanks to you for read.
many thanks to you for read. relieving to know the subject line is quite clear beyond the “mundane". Lil
bless
respects.
WonderGolly
What I love most about POETS is how they write SADNESS with SUNSHINE on their face, caption RAIN with FALLEN EMBERS and paint TEARS using the colours of WATERFALLS:lol
alidzain
Sat, 2014-03-22 04:24
Wow
I like this, man. I agree with Jess. It is a class of its own. I'm going to check out the rest of your works. Good job Keep on writing.
Alid
WonderGolly
Fri, 2014-03-28 07:56
blessed to have you around
blessed to have you around and thanks for the encouragement.
respects
respects.
WonderGolly
What I love most about POETS is how they write SADNESS with SUNSHINE on their face, caption RAIN with FALLEN EMBERS and paint TEARS using the colours of WATERFALLS:lol