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Dead Poets

Submitted by Blue-eyed Bolla on Sun, 2024-09-08 06:29

Poets are damned to live and die
beneath this sacrilegious sky.
They pen their petty piece of rhyme
They’re slaves, so they must steal the time

to pour themselves upon the page.
(They couldn't work without a wage!)
They hate to focus on themselves.
Their lives lie shattered on sad shelves.

They seek some kindly eye to see
(a heart in love with poetry!)
A kindred kind with selfsame soul
who’ll criticise, and yet console.

The poets, when they no more breathe,
(while nations war and oceans seethe)
leave verse (its value may be none!)
to live, when they are dead and gone.

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neopoet

Sun, 2024-09-08 12:30

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Dead Poets" explores the struggles and desires of poets, portraying them as individuals who are compelled to create despite feeling enslaved by their craft. The poem delves into themes of self-expression, seeking validation, and the legacy that poets leave behind.

One aspect that stands out in the poem is the contrast between the internal turmoil of the poets and the timeless nature of their work. The juxtaposition of personal struggles with the enduring quality of poetry creates a poignant reflection on the role of poets in society.

The poem effectively conveys a sense of melancholy and introspection through its imagery and language. The use of phrases like "sacrilegious sky" and "shattered on sad shelves" evokes a mood of despair and isolation, highlighting the emotional weight that poets carry.

However, one suggestion for improvement could be to further develop the imagery and metaphorical language to enhance the depth of the poem. Exploring more vivid and evocative descriptions could help to immerse the reader

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Geezer

Sun, 2024-09-08 09:19

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while apt, a bit ordinary. However, the rhythm and flow are excellent, to say the least. Your rhyme was perfect, right up until...
the last two lines.
I imagine, it could be put down to accent, but I think that I would have irresistibly been drawn to use the word [done] instead of
[gone]. Nicely done sir, nicely done. ~ Geez.
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